## [RT][FF] Chapter 25 of Lighting Up the Dark, a rational Naruto fanfic

* Author: u/Velorien *
* URL: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9311012/26/Lighting-Up-the-Dark
* Score: 39

* Created: 2015-12-21T10:47:38

### Post:

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### Comments:

> **u/ZeroNihilist** [+20]  (29 minutes later)
> 
> Mother of Learning, Team Anko, and Lighting Up the Dark updating on the same day? What is this, Christmas?

>> **u/Saffrin-chan** [+5]  (8 hours later)
>> 
>> Well... yes. ^Give ^or ^take ^5 ^days ^:)

>> **u/Solonarv** [+3]  *Chaos Legion* (17 hours later)
>> 
>> Significant Digits, too. Though that's not as infrequent as the other three :p

> **u/shashwat986** [+18]  (19 minutes later)
> 
> Absolutely brilliant!
> 
> > The Nara are taught from birth to live in shadow, so that others do not have to live in theirs.

> **u/Nevereatcars** [+18]  *The Greatest Is Behind* (2 hours later)
> 
> Holy crap, you've somehow managed to have a character manipulate Naruto *even more blatantly* than Eaglejarl did.

>> **u/eaglejarl** [+6]  (12 hours later)
>> 
>> I'm not sure if I should be flattered to be the standard of comparison or insulted at...something?  I know, I'll be insulomplimented.

>>> **u/Nevereatcars** [+4]  *The Greatest Is Behind* (14 hours later)
>>> 
>>> I didn't intend to insult you, so just be flattered.

>>>> **u/eaglejarl** [+3]  (15 hours later)
>>>> 
>>>> I wasn't actually, I just liked the word insomplimented.

>> **u/JulianWyvern** [+6]  *Wayward Wanderer* (2 hours later)
>> 
>> It only gets better because THIS Naruto had time to develop his rationality!

>> **u/Solonarv** [+4]  *Chaos Legion* (17 hours later)
>> 
>> Wait, what do you mean? [](#s "Kurama") is just trying to help Naruto, why do you have to be so suspicious of him all the time?

>>> **u/Nevereatcars** [+5]  *The Greatest Is Behind* (17 hours later)
>>> 
>>> "I only used you in ways that made you stronger. That's what it means to be used by a friend."
>>> 
>>> -Harry James Potter Evans Verres    
>>> and Kurama at some point, hopefully.

> **u/blazinghand** [+11]  *Chaos Undivided* (10 hours later)
> 
> I like this introduction of Jiraiya. It's easy to forget that in addition to being a legendary ninja capable of summons and jutsu beyond that of any jounin, Jiraiya is also a spymaster. This is exactly the kind of test he'd run, and also the way he'd choose to apprehend Naruto. Jiraiya is good with people!

> **u/DrunkenQuetzalcoatl** [+9]  (11 hours later)
> 
> In canon the [Bell Test](http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Bell_Test) was not invented by Kakashi. It was already used on the Sannin and Kakashis team. I believe Kakashi continues to give this test in canon even after it has failed on Orochimaru because of nostalgia/trauma. A test you can pass by not caring about passing (like the first Chuunin Test in canon) is not very good.

> **u/Aretii** [+4]  *Cultist of Cthugha* (6 hours later)
> 
> So I'm guessing neither of the Hyuugas passed.
> 
> Bummer that we now have to wait for undefined time, but I imagine it'll be worth it. Incidentally - are you planning to go back and clean up the initial chapters at any point? Your later writing blows it out of the water, and the contrast in style is really apparent.

>> **u/None** [+10]  (6 hours later)
>> 
>> [removed]

>>> **u/ProperAttorney** [+10]  (9 hours later)
>>> 
>>> Seems like he means edit. Mostly reading over your work and rewording things in ways that make the story flow better, removing extraneous word or sentences, maybe even adding in descriptions where you think necessary. It's not a point against you, it's that most people become better at things after having practiced them and you've become so much better now that the difference is noticeable between this chapter and the first few.

>>>> **u/None** [+5]  (9 hours later)
>>>> 
>>>> [removed]

>>>>> **u/Transfuturist** [+17]  *Carthago delenda est.* (11 hours later)
>>>>> 
>>>>> It would be better to wait until the entire work is completed before revising, if revising is indeed worth it. You aren't making any money off of this, and revising is probably not as enjoyable as writing the first draft.

>>>>>> **u/erasels** [+3]  (2 days later)
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> This. A lot of authors want to revise their first few chapters and then stop writing, because of lack of motivation.

>>> **u/None** [+3]  (9 hours later)
>>> 
>>> Editing, re-writes (Wildbow re-wrote the first seven arcs of Worm later on, for instance), I'm guessing. I definitely agree that the early chapters could use some work. Your writing has gotten much better.

> **u/masterax2000** [+1]  *Chaos Legion* (2 months later)
> 
> So... any progress on the next chapter?

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