## Chapter 2- Draco Outpost – Sufficiently Analyzed Magic [RST] [WIP]

* Author: u/None *
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* Score: 10

* Created: 2017-08-05T15:35:25

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> **u/Gigapode** [+4]  (12 hours later)
> 
> What is this please?

>> **u/jldew** [+1]  (22 hours later)
>> 
>> This is a story about a semi-transhuman mankind that has reached to the stars using technomagery and applied phlebotonium. They might have had some alien interference along the way.

> **u/jldew** [+1]  (29 minutes later)
> 
> Typo thread :)

>> **u/wren42** [+1]  (2 days later)
>> 
>> >“Unless Pax was a bust,”    
>> >“Twenty minutes,”  
>> 
>> use period instead of comma.  it's like this in many places where a quotation ends.  use a comma only in cases that the sentence continues, such as ' "Ouch," she said. '
>> 
>> >Some new mix of AI and Artificing she thought abomination.
>> 
>> break out "she thought" somehow, either commas, italics, or quotes. 
>> 
>> >starfighter’s
>> 
>> no apostrophe for plural. 
>> 
>> >These scans are worry.  
>> 
>> tense. 
>> 
>> >closely cropped haird
>> 
>> typo
>> 
>> >dossier’s   
>> 
>> plural, no '
>> 
>> >She has been sent to the best schools. Had graduated the Academy of War  
>> 
>> "had" or "has" pick one, not both. 
>> 
>> > unknown races battleship.
>> 
>> possessive should use '
>> 
>> >drove a furrow into the prospective colony’s ground.  
>> 
>> This one's correct, actually.  just wanted to call it out for being right ;)

>>> **u/jldew** [+1]  (2 days later)
>>> 
>>> Thanks. I'm on Mobile, but I will Fix Asap.

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