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RT? Known chapter 4 (Worm/Shadows of the Limelight)
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Author: u/rationalidurr If fighting is sure to result in victory, then you must fight!*
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URL: https://www.reddit.com/r/rational/comments/3b6hg5/rt_known_chapter_4_wormshadows_of_the_limelight/
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Score: 16
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Created: 2015-06-26T10:46:28
Post:
Guy made a thread for his story as well as a new chapter
https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/known-worm-shadows-of-the-limelight-au.345500/#post-17951910
Comments:
u/notmy2ndopinion [+3] Concent of Saunt Edhar (2 hours later)
Can Gaelwyn affect insects?
Panacea made Atlas and she was hostile at worst, ambivalent at best, towards Taylor. What can Taylor+Gaelwyn make to boost his fame?
u/alexanderwales [+4] Time flies like an arrow (5 hours later)
Define insect. Gaelwyn can affect flesh, which means muscles and fats, with some secondary control over things that are made of muscles and fats (like veins and arteries). My knowledge of insect morphology/physiology isn't great, but I would think that he'd only be able to affect certain parts of the insect that fall under his domain (namely, not the exoskeleton). So if you want a hulked out cricket, that might work.
As shown in 3.1, Taylor can control larger creatures like crabs, or other things that have shells or exoskeletons, so he could soup up one of those in some way, which might make sense.
The better application is probably altering Taylor directly. Gaelwyn can remove any extra fat and pack on (or tweak) muscles to give someone the Steve Rogers treatment. I'm fairly sure that Panacea can do this, but doesn't for personal/psychological reasons.
(And obviously this is just Opinion of God.)
u/None [+3] (9 hours later)
Unless I'm dead set on a plot point, I'll be writing based on Opinion of God.
u/notmy2ndopinion [+1] Concent of Saunt Edhar (16 hours later)
Hm. The classical "flesh" domain of Gaelwyn does pose a problem, until he delves more into modern medical texts and does experiments on phospholipids, actin/myosin, microfilaments, microtubules and cellular transport to see what he can actually affect on a molecular bio level...
And Taylor can affect anything with a "simple mind." Gaelwyn lacks the restriction of affecting minds that Panacea does... and he may be able to distinguish himself from her by healing and rewiring brains which possess a lot of fatty tissue in the form of myelin sheaths for Schwann cells.
u/None [+2] (9 hours later)
Anyone want to beta for the next chapter?
u/notmy2ndopinion [+3] Concent of Saunt Edhar (16 hours later)
PM me -- I'm a physician so I can review medical facts and answer any questions you have (btw, I'm thrilled by the Panacea/Gaelwyn crossover!)
u/None [+1] (16 hours later)
It's already up, but once I do the next one, I will. If I do anything that requires precise knowledge of medical facts, I'll ask. I've been trying to keep them vague so as to avoid bogging down the wordcount and/or infuriating anyone who knows anything, but Gaelwyn's precise abilities, limits, and the workarounds for such are going to come up at some point.
I think Gaelwyn and Bonesaw would be interesting as well, but that'd be a pretty major thing that'll require a hell of a lot of run-up. Gaelwyn's arc in canon, I noticed, is a lot like Bonesaw's, but stretched out over a lifetime.
u/notmy2ndopinion [+3] Concent of Saunt Edhar (17 hours later)
Hehe, I liked the dig about Atlas. Glad I called it on that one!
Worm!Gaelwyn is surprisingly emotionally mature. He'd be a great "been there, done that" mentor for Bonesaw if she claws her way out of the darkness. While we don't yet have a full sense of Limelight!Gaelwyn, he seems to have... naïveté... and a sad hound-dog tailing his master sort of a feel to him.
u/None [+1] (17 hours later)
Hmmm, yeah, take that more as me being bad at voice than a deliberate decision. I guess I didn't want to write a sad, unsure protagonist. I wanted to write a "new world, new leaf" kind of protagonist. I figure the shock to his system, near-BBQ-experience, and sudden new social environment is enough to justify the changes, but it wasn't a conscious decision.
I am not an experienced writer.
u/notmy2ndopinion [+1] Concent of Saunt Edhar (2 days later)
I disagree -- it's wonderful writing.
Worm!Gaelwyn's been thrust into the role of primary protagonist and knows he needs to step up to fulfill that narrative and get over himself!
u/None [+1] (2 days later)
Writing can be unintentionally good, and writing can be intentionally good. The difference between the two is that the second can be replicated.