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[RT][FF] Chapter 24 of Lighting Up the Dark, a rational Naruto fanfic
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Author: u/Velorien *
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URL: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9311012/25/Lighting-Up-the-Dark
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Score: 44
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Created: 2015-12-14T19:18:18
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u/XxChronOblivionxX [+27] (2 hours later)
Now that was a fight scene. This feels like a return to form with Naruto starting to utilize his Uzumaki Style of fighting again.
With luck, Naruto will let this result take him down a peg. Naruto had such a big advantage with those clones, combined with henging, and Shikamaru still outplayed him at basically every single point besides his last-minute surrender from Tenten. The absolute best part of that was that Shikamaru had earplugs in the entire time, and never gave it away, which either means he read Naruto's lips when he yelled at him, or predicted how he would react with ridiculous precision. This'll teach Naruto to underestimate his opponent.
u/blazinghand [+12] Chaos Undivided (2 hours later)
The earplugs thing is also great because even if he was somehow struck or caught in the range of the auditory genjutsu, he STILL was fine. He actually had an extra degree of failsafe available.
u/Transfuturist [+16] Carthago delenda est. (3 hours later)
Tenten's eyes lit up with a sudden glow.
"ThirtyexplodingtagsseventyshurikenonebrandnewFūmashurikenfortykunaifourkusarigamafoursicklestwolargemacesoneflailfourshortswords…"
This chuunin exam might be the best ever.
there were plenty of safer ways to gain new powers, like stabbing himself through the heart with a katana
Bleach.
or making pacts with supernatural beings without checking exactly what they wanted in return.
Team Anko. :P
u/Nevereatcars [+7] The Greatest Is Behind (8 hours later)
This is my favorite Tenten of all fanfiction Tentens. And there are SO MANY fanfiction Tentens.
u/eaglejarl [+4] (a day later)
or making pacts with supernatural beings without checking exactly what they wanted in return.Team Anko. :P
bow
u/abcd_z [+15] (3 hours later)
kinjutsu
*groans*
u/blazinghand [+1] Chaos Undivided (a day later)
technically correct!
u/Aretii [+14] Cultist of Cthugha (3 hours later)
First reaction: Yeah, I was pretty sure Shikamaru was going to advance. Was about 50/50 on whether Naruto would be outright defeated. I like the fact that while this Naruto might be much more rational, he's not just The Smartest.
Second reaction: THAT'S GREAT AND ALL, BUT OUT OF NEJI AND HINATA, WHICH ONE, IF EITHER, ADVANCED???
u/Subrosian_Smithy [+9] Nudist Beach (5 hours later)
As for learning a super-advanced ninjutsu like the Multiple Shadow Clone Technique without supervision… there were plenty of safer ways to gain new powers, like stabbing himself through the heart with a katana, or making pacts with supernatural beings without checking exactly what they wanted in return. Naruto still couldn't articulate what had possessed him.
Naruto still couldn't articulate what had possessed him.
possessed him
*equips tinfoil hat*
u/None [+3] (16 hours later)
Could be, but that's thick tinfoil right there.
u/JulianWyvern [+8] Wayward Wanderer (6 hours later)
Woooooow.
I can only imagine the mess it was to write that
u/None [+6] (16 hours later)
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u/JulianWyvern [+4] Wayward Wanderer (17 hours later)
By the way, something I forgot to ask. Are the Nara avoiding this weird mistake that I feel like they made in canon that is to wear their equipment on "standard" locations?
I mean, in canon, during this fight, after Shikamaru gets Kin with the Shadow Repetition, he moves to grab a shuriken and obviously she ends up grabbing one too since both of their pouches are in the relatively same places. If he had just wore his on the other leg he could've grabbed one of hiks shuriken and she would have nothing.
Similarly, if a Nara ninja ever finds an enemy, and gets the Shadow Repetition on, they can make the enemy grab one of their kunai from somewhere, where, presumably the Nara would have nothing and make a stabbing motion at your own neck which would be completely harmless for the Nara and lethal to the enemy ninja
u/None [+8] (18 hours later)
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u/sir_pirriplin [+2] (a day later)
I think canon covers this too. One time, Shikamaru caught Gaara with the shadow and when Naruto punched Gaara, it hurt Shikamaru as well. So making an enemy cut himself might not be safe.
However, it can still serve as a bluff to make them surrender.
u/JulianWyvern [+1] Wayward Wanderer (18 hours later)
Oh, must have missed this in my first read
u/None [+7] (16 hours later)
I think I've got a brain-boner.
Still doesn't explain how the fuck Shikamaru thinks, though.
u/narfanator [+1] (2 days later)
Well, so the big guy has a power that effects physical size in fun awesome ways. What if Shikamaru's core "power" is mad boost to mental capabilities, particularly, speed of thought? I can easily imagine a huge power cost difference in speeding up everything that doesn't move versus speeding up anything that does move. I mean, that's a common thing in Mage: The Awakening - stuff that effects just you is easy, but breaks as soon you as interact with anything outside.
If that's the case (or, if I wanna be all egotistical, NOW the case...), however, it means the Shadow technique is either an unusual application of that power (moving things that don't have mass, or something) and/or they're both good at and have branched out to particularly useful abilities given their core strengths (critical application of slight action). The other one I would then expect is a perceptive technique like the byakugan - something that, among other things, lets you perceive in detail outside of not only the focal point of your eyes, but through your head, as the major weakness in "I am now thinking at 100x" is getting new information....
Which kind of in turn leads into "combos are broken" - as seen in Time Braid and/or Drop of Poison? - but really as seen in the enlightenment. Which is now making me think about interesting historical relations between "sharing information" and "people not trying to kill you with what you taught them"...
u/None [+1] (3 days later)
It would be a nice parallel with the fact that shadow is faster than light, but I honestly doubt Velorien will go that route.
Quickened total perception would be op as fuck.
u/DrunkenQuetzalcoatl [+1] (54 minutes later)
maybe twice the length of her hand
Do you mean twice the length of her arm?
u/None [+8] (58 minutes later)
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u/blazinghand [+10] Chaos Undivided (an hour later)
DrunkenQuetzalcoatl thinks that phrase applies to "naginata" but it actually applies to "scroll". The sentence isn't ambiguous but could confuse someone who is reading quickly.
u/DrunkenQuetzalcoatl [+4] (an hour later)
Yes that is how I read it. The sentence sounds ambiguous to me but I am not a native speaker.
u/blazinghand [+6] Chaos Undivided (an hour later)
It is a LITTLE ambiguous, but the size at the end there could apply to either "Naginata" OR "scroll" by english grammar rules. In that sense that I could say:
"I ate a chicken slice with my hand the size of my face" - it would be unclear which thing is the size of my face. Or I could say:
"He drew a sword from his scabbard covered in blue gems" - it's not clear whether the sword or the scabbard has blue gems
Technically this is the kind of thing you could get dinged on by an english teach who is a real stickler. That being said:
"He at a small egg from a basket that was a foot long" while technically grammatically ambiguous, is not actually ambiguous, because the first half of the sentence says the egg is small, so it must be the basket that is long. By the same token, a full-sized Naginata can't be twice the length of her hand, so it must be the scroll that is.
Try to avoid writing sentences like this I guess
u/DrunkenQuetzalcoatl [+1] (an hour later)
Well while we are stickly (is that a word?) about the english language: The full-sized qualifier actually added to my confusion because she is about 12/13 in canon when she fought the first time in the exam and I thought Velorien described the size of a full-sized (children) naginata relative to her own size.
u/blazinghand [+3] Chaos Undivided (an hour later)
Ah, I see! Yeah, I also didn't know what a naginata was so I looked it up, which caused me to reread the sentence which probably helped with my comprehension of it. A naginata is like a spear so even a full-sized one for a child would be pretty tall, definitely longer than two hands.
u/DrunkenQuetzalcoatl [+1] (2 hours later)
And I actually already knew what it was from the manga "Gamaran" so I only read it one time.
u/MultipartiteMind [+1] (a day later)
(I've likely forgotten something--if both sides have one person surrendered and one person unsurrendered, then why is the battle over?)
u/nervix709 [+3] (a day later)
If you take out one of your opponents, you are out, and you move on to the next round of the Chunin exam, and the other two combatants finish the fight 1v1.
u/MultipartiteMind [+1] (4 days later)
Ahh. Thank you! (That makes me wonder whether people often end up fighting each other while competing to take out the weaker enemy first.)