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## [RT][FF]Hermione Granger and the Perfectly Reasonable Explanation - Ch 13: In Memoriam
* Author: u/RobinDrew *Ravenclaw - (Author: HGPRE)**
* URL: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9950232/16/Hermione-Granger-and-the-Perfectly-Reasonable-Explanation
* Score: 25
* Created: 2016-07-15T15:30:49
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### Comments:
> **u/AugSphere** [+7] *Dark Lord of Corruption* (an hour later)
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> > …she didn't realize she'd actually murmured her thought aloud.
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> This was a bit much for my SoD, unless it's a result of some mental manipulation (in which case, why?). Maybe I'm just miscalibrated and people actually do tend to accidentally make allegations of murder out loud IRL.
>> **u/RobinDrew** [+2] *Ravenclaw - (Author: HGPRE)* (4 hours later)
>>
>> I think accidentally speaking out loud IRL is probably less correlated with the seriousness of the content than with the level of *surprise* at the thought - or it least it has been for me personally. Validation would be tricky though - it might be impractical to get a valid statistical sample of people IRL having come to sudden realizations about murders. :)
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>> That said, I admit that bit was likely inspired more by drama than "naturally follows from everything preceding", but it still seemed plausible enough to me.
> **u/Wireless-Wizard** [+5] *The Foundation* (2 days later)
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> >Hogwarts' reputation for student safety has remained the envy of Europe
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> Jesus Christ, what's the body count at Beuxbatons?
>> **u/AugSphere** [+3] *Dark Lord of Corruption* (2 days later)
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>> To be fair, he's in the middle of a speech the main purpose of which is to create an impression that Pomfrey was very virtuous and important. He wouldn't be the most unbiased source for a student safety appraisal at the best of times, but during this particular speech he's even less likely to prioritise factual accuracy than usual.
>> **u/RobinDrew** [+1] *Ravenclaw - (Author: HGPRE)* (3 days later)
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>> Circa 1991, Hogwarts' two in 50 years is pretty solid. If you count physical safety, anyway, and not becoming-a-Dark-Lord, in which case there's another casualty. ;)
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>> A lot of Beauxbatons' black marks might be experimental cosmetic Potion or Transfiguration mishaps. Not everyone can be part-Veela, the pressure could be pretty intense.
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>> Edit: Increased the total above, forgot I'd added poor Moira to that list.
> **u/RobinDrew** [+3] *Ravenclaw - (Author: HGPRE)* (2 minutes later)
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> ArchiveofOurOwn mirror, for those who prefer it: http://archiveofourown.org/works/7441657/chapters/17033832
> **u/RobinDrew** [+2] *Ravenclaw - (Author: HGPRE)* (a minute later)
>
> * Official Typo/Britpick Thread, if you are so inclined, helps if they're all in one place
>> **u/torac** [+2] (2 days later)
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>> > which she suspect didn't even exist
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>> suspected
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>> >Try to go to bed early the first time you test it, so in case I've missed the dosage you don't end up missing classes?
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>> It is phrased a bit awkwardly, as you are ending an imperative sentence with a question mark, which is something one does in actual speech, but I at least would refrain from in written speech. Also, you used both "missed" and "missing".
>>> **u/RobinDrew** [+2] *Ravenclaw - (Author: HGPRE)* (2 days later)
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>>> Gotcha on the first one, thanks!
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>>> On the second - when I write dialogue (or internal monologue), I always write it as it sounds, which I think helps with voice and characterization. I agree the sentence is a little clumsy - I did ponder for a while on how best to phrase "missed the dosage" - but in the end I left it...Nurse Wainscott has multiple excuses to be less polished in her delivery. :)
> **u/HermioneGPEV** [+2] (5 hours later)
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> > The line of reasoning so disturbed Hermione ~~sufficiently~~ that she abandoned the analysis and looked instead for alternative explanations.
>> **u/RobinDrew** [+2] *Ravenclaw - (Author: HGPRE)* (10 hours later)
>>
>> Agh, good catch, thanks!
>>> **u/HermioneGPEV** [+2] (15 hours later)
>>>
>>> You're welcome! And thanks for correcting!
>>>> **u/None** [+3] (a day later)
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>>>> [deleted]
>>>>> **u/HermioneGPEV** [+1] (a day later)
>>>>>
>>>>> Thanks!
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