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## The Good Student - Chapter Twenty Five
* Author: u/Veedrac *
* URL: http://gravitytales.com/Novel/the-good-student/tgs-chapter-25
* Score: 52
* Created: 2017-07-23T19:46:35
### Post:
[Link to content](http://gravitytales.com/Novel/the-good-student/tgs-chapter-25)
### Comments:
> **u/JulianWyvern** [+15] *Wayward Wanderer* (7 hours later)
>
> Ah, title drop huh.
>
> The sudden shift in scene from the librarian telling Nic to follow her and then into the cafeteria was bit weird, I feel like a mention of her showing Nic the book would be better before one of those scene break marks and then the cafeteria scene. Would probably require minor changes for the bed scene, probably just having Nic mention the paper with his notes from the book
>> **u/KilotonDefenestrator** [+5] (a day later)
>>
>> > The sudden shift in scene from the librarian telling Nic to follow her and then into the cafeteria was bit weird,
>>
>> This confused me too. I had to go back and read it again to check if I had unconsciously skipped a paragraph. I think it would flow better if there was something there to bridge the gap, however minor.
>>
>> Really liking the story so far.
>> **u/tokol** [+3] *The Greater Good* (22 hours later)
>>
>> Typos:
>>
>> > “I dont know belong to any clubs,” said Nic.
>>
>> know belong -> belong
>>> **u/mooderino** [+2] *The Good Student* (a day later)
>>>
>>> Thanks.
> **u/Iconochasm** [+10] (6 hours later)
>
> Beautiful closing paragraph. Things were shaky for a couple of chapters there, but I'm really liking where this is going.
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