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[RT][WIP] Blood, Bone, Breath and Bile - Chapter 2
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Author: u/VilhalmFeidhlim *
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URL: https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3326461/2/Blood-Bone-Breath-and-Bile
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Score: 33
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Created: 2018-07-07T20:24:56
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u/sparr [+1] (2 hours later)
high hopes but low expectations for a rationally built world that contains accurate predictions of the future. the munchkin monday thread would have a field day with that.
u/1337_w0n [+1] (23 hours later)
The decision to flesh out the setting and his circumstances is not one that I was expecting. I can appreciate the classic self-absorbed amoral organization that is more concerned about its reputation than its constituates, but I feel like it would be best to yell us more about Aswen first. Of course if you are doing it with purpose, for example never giving him a physical description as a writing tactic, keep going because that might be interesting.
I didn’t catch any typos the first go around.
u/MultipartiteMind [+1] (2 days later)
(What connection between keratin and bone?) (I keep thinking it should be Blood ('Water'), Bone ('Earth'), Breath ('Air'), and Brain ('Fire').)