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[RT][WIP] Gobbos with Guns
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Author: u/None *
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URL: https://www.reddit.com/r/rational/comments/9k4arl/rtwip_gobbos_with_guns/
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Score: 16
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Created: 2018-09-30T06:47:42
Post:
So, after receiving critique on my previous story, The Vasra Journals. I thought I might try something different (haha! No you didn't, you just read over the first four chapters and thought it needed a rewrite but you're too lazy to do a rewrite, so instead you wanted to make something new and avoid your masochistic wish fulfillment! Got you villain! /3rd person).
[So I decided to try something else and apply the criticism I received—Honestly, thanks for that guys](https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/20385/gobbos-with-guns/chapter/288148/fray-11)
So far there's only four chapters, and I love criticism, it's what I live for. (That and french toast)
May Papa Nurgle bless us with his holy contagion
Comments:
u/aldonius [+3] *
Intriguing! RSS-subscribed.
u/Trips-Over-Tail [+2] Death of Crabs*
I was expecting a Croc fic.
u/None [+2] *
Okay, I'll bite, what's a croc fic?
u/Trips-Over-Tail [+2] Death of Crabs*
A fanfic about Croc.
u/None [+1] *
hahahaha
u/zombieking26 [+2] *
I like it so far! Though I would recommend injecting some enpathy into your main character. I think a pure psychopathic character might get boring, sooner or later.
u/None [+2] *
;) it's actually written in my notes
u/Sonderjye [+2] *
This is quite an interesting start. It makes a lot of sense that there'll be a total lack of compassion if he's been raised in a gobbo village. I second the suggestion for having him grow somewhat out of his upbringing somewhere down the line.
I also hope he gets to learn magic.
u/AllFuckingNamesGone [+1] *
Is it possible to reduce the space between paragraphs somehow, it's quite annoying to read like that.
u/None [+1] *
I write in double space so I can spot mistakes quickly and edit them out without misclicking around in Google Docs (cloud storage, safety first!) So I just checked out some other chapters, and other peoples' works. Yeah, it is kind of annoying, I'll make it doesn't happen in future chapters, and I got to figure out what exactly is causing it, because it seems to have happened in every chapter besides 1.3.