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## [RT][WIP] Gobbos with Guns
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* Author: u/None *
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* URL: https://www.reddit.com/r/rational/comments/9k4arl/rtwip_gobbos_with_guns/
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* Score: 16
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* Created: 2018-09-30T06:47:42
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### Post:
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So, after receiving critique on my previous story, *The Vasra Journals*. I thought I might try something different (haha! No you didn't, you just read over the first four chapters and thought it needed a rewrite but you're too lazy to do a rewrite, so instead you wanted to make something new and avoid your masochistic wish fulfillment! Got you villain! /3rd person).
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\[So I decided to try something else and apply the criticism I received—Honestly, thanks for that guys\]([https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/20385/gobbos-with-guns/chapter/288148/fray-11](https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/20385/gobbos-with-guns/chapter/288148/fray-11))
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So far there's only four chapters, and I love criticism, it's what I live for. (That and french toast)
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May Papa Nurgle bless us with his holy contagion
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### Comments:
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> **u/aldonius** [+3] *
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> Intriguing! RSS-subscribed.
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> **u/Trips-Over-Tail** [+2] *Death of Crabs**
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> I was expecting a Croc fic.
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>> **u/None** [+2] *
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>> Okay, I'll bite, what's a croc fic?
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>>> **u/Trips-Over-Tail** [+2] *Death of Crabs**
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>>> A fanfic about [Croc](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Croc:_Legend_of_the_Gobbos).
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>>>> **u/None** [+1] *
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>>>> hahahaha
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>>>>
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> **u/zombieking26** [+2] *
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> I like it so far! Though I would recommend injecting some enpathy into your main character. I think a pure psychopathic character might get boring, sooner or later.
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>> **u/None** [+2] *
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>> ;)
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>> it's actually written in my notes
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> **u/Sonderjye** [+2] *
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> This is quite an interesting start. It makes a lot of sense that there'll be a total lack of compassion if he's been raised in a gobbo village. I second the suggestion for having him grow somewhat out of his upbringing somewhere down the line.
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> I also hope he gets to learn magic.
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> **u/AllFuckingNamesGone** [+1] *
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> Is it possible to reduce the space between paragraphs somehow, it's quite annoying to read like that.
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>> **u/None** [+1] *
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>> I write in double space so I can spot mistakes quickly and edit them out without misclicking around in Google Docs (cloud storage, safety first!)
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>> So I just checked out some other chapters, and other peoples' works.
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>> Yeah, it is kind of annoying, I'll make it doesn't happen in future chapters, and I got to figure out what exactly is causing it, because it seems to have happened in every chapter besides 1.3.
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