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## [RT] [WIP] [HSF] Set In Stone Chapter 23 |
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* Author: u/josephwdye *I love you**
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* URL: https://setinstonestory.wordpress.com/2015/07/28/chapter-23/
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* Score: 12
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* Created: 2015-07-28T21:40:00
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### Post:
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[Link to content](https://setinstonestory.wordpress.com/2015/07/28/chapter-23/)
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### Comments:
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> **u/Farmerbob1** [+1] *Level 1 author* (9 minutes later)
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> I would like people's assessment of what is happening around Allen. Specifically, are the reactions of the officers and Riko making sense?
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> EDIT: josephwdye beat me to posting a link to my own chapter. *really* confused me for a minute :)
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>> **u/clawclawbite** [+2] (58 minutes later)
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>> Albert confuses all issues. No one else should have a clear or easy reaction.
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>> The one hole I see is not asking after what he said and for speculation on how he might similarly take action to limit the opposing forces.
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>> Also, the not going over his story in fine detail is off. The officer got off topic and did not get back on, but knew it was important.
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>>> **u/Farmerbob1** [+1] *Level 1 author* (an hour later)
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>>> The next chapter will start with Riko picking at Allen's arguments, if Allen doesn't immediately fold.
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>>> The officers know that Allen has a temper. They also know that Allen will listen to Riko, and if there's any way to push past Albert's influence, Riko will probably find it.
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>>> Does that help, since you can't read forward yet? Do you believe I should seed something else in this chapter to clarify these things?
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>>> With the story being solely from Allen's viewpoint, I'm limited in how much I can narrate outside of his knowledge, and I don't want him to be too intelligent and calculating, even if I am trying to show that he is getting better at it.
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>>>> **u/clawclawbite** [+2] (an hour later)
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>>>> It was more that I was expecting them to try to push around the edges and not try to fight it head on.
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>>>> Albert seems like people who know enough should find his attention scary, and focused on avoiding it.
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>>>> The actual pushing works well.
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>> **u/Empiricist_or_not** [+2] *Aspiring polite Hegemonizing swarm* (an hour later)
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>> It seems crystal clear to me:
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>> What Allen knows:
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>> * Allen figured out you can guns without metal.
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>> * Albert bribed Allen not to tell how to make guns without metal
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>> * Albert will put humanity through a pre-literature stone age if guns are re-invented.
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>> * Allen knows the best thing to do for him country and himself is not disclose how to make guns.
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>> What the army Knows:
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>> * Allen is a useful violence consultant for people constitutionally ill disposed for it.
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>> * Allen doesn't want to be a violence consultant
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>> * Allen claims Albert said he can't be a violence consultant
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>> * If Allen isn't lying then there is something he thought up that could be *significantly* violent and therefore useful in the war.
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>> => The army knows they should try to get Allen to tell him what he came up with.
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>> This is because the army doesn't know Allen talking would be much much worse than their own nation being wiped out.
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>> Edit formatting
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>>> **u/clawclawbite** [+3] (an hour later)
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>>> Allen really needs to express that it would be better in the long run for a volcano to erupt where he is standing right now than for him to break the deal.
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>>>> **u/Empiricist_or_not** [+2] *Aspiring polite Hegemonizing swarm* (3 hours later)
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>>>> The problem is it is very hard to get past family or tribe loyalty hardwiring.
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